+3 Spell of Whoop Ass
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Enjoy! Comment if you like it :P
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Ooooo! I like it! There are a few confusing parts, but overall, a very good story. grins Well done.
Zala
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which parts confused ya? :P
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I just re-read it, so I get it now. I hadn't slept in a while when I read it the first time. smiles
Its a very good story. I think maybe some more background info on the characters would make it a lot better though. Maybe some info on Mercedes' family, and the council, and maybe a brief bit about why Mercedes responds to Natalia the way she does. It would add depth to an already great story.
Oh, and one minor correction. You have Chapter 6 in there twice.
Thanks for sharing that story! I really like it.
Zala
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